Friday, January 28, 2011

Williams 4.4

These sentences have been changed from passive to active, or left passive for justified reasons. Changed verbs are in italics.

1. Your figures were analyzed to determine their accuracy. We will announce the results when appropriate. (This could be a note from department head to students who have taken a test)

2. Banks now make Home Mortgage loans for thirty years. With the price of housing at inflated levels, homeowners cannot pay off these loans in a shorter time.

3.The author abandoned his impassioned narrative and presented a cautious treatment of conspiracy theories. But when he picked up the narrative line again, he invested his prose with the same vigor and force.

4. Many arguments were advanced against Darwinian evolution in the nineteenth century because it challenged basic assumptions about our place in the world. Darwin's theory no longer defined humans as privileged creatures but rather as a product of natural forces.

5. For many years, the government has enforced federal regulations concerning wiretapping. Only recently have they imposed looser restrictions on warranting circumstances.

6. I believe an analysis of peer interaction among adolescents most clearly explains the social significance of smoking. In particular, studies should be made of the manner in which social class conditions interactive behavior.

7. We have written these directives in a simple style in an effort to communicate effectively with employees with limited reading skills.

8. Studies with little scientific reliability have caused researchers to undervalue the human brain's solution-creating abilities.

1 comment:

  1. I would change number 6 to emphasize the analysis as the most important information.

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